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Post by Jace Beleren on Aug 12, 2012 21:56:15 GMT -7
[atrb=border,0,true][atrb=cellpadding,0,true][atrb=valign, top][atrb=cellspacing,0,true][atrb=style, border: 10px solid #f1e3b4; width: 450px; background-color: #f6f7f1;][STYLE=font-family: courier new; font-size: 36px; color: #191919; text-align: center; letter-spacing: 2px;]PERMANENT FILE[/style][STYLE=float: right; margin: 10px 10px 0px 0px; padding: 2px; border: 1px solid #000000;][/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-left: 10px;]NAME: Jace Beleren ALIAS: The Mind Sculptor AGE: 26 GENDER: Male ETHNICITY/RACE: Caucasian CLASSIFICATION: Mutant SEXUALITY: Heterosexual BIRTH PLACE: California, Los Angeles OCCUPATION: Shopkeeper - Spiritual Healing HEIGHT: Six Feet WEIGHT: One-Hundred Forty pounds FACE CLAIM: Magic the Gathering [ MTG ] | Jace Beleren | Jace Beleren
PERSONALITY TRAITS:[/style][STYLE= margin: 0px 10px 0px 10px; border: 2px solid #191919; padding: 2px; font-family: verdana; height: 125px; overflow: auto; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; background-color: #ffffff; opacity: 0.8]
- Calm
- Loyal
- Stern
- Intelligent
- Kind
- Vengeful
- Insensitive
- Perceptive
[/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-left: 10px;]APPEARANCE [/style][STYLE= margin: 0px 10px 0px 10px; border: 2px solid #191919; padding: 2px; font-family: verdana; height: 125px; overflow: auto; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; background-color: #ffffff; opacity: 0.8] Jace looks as though a normal twenty year old at the first glance; however, many things can be noticed to the right eye. His hair not unlike many is black with a few streaks of blue hue going through the tips. More noticeably is his eyes, to which glow with a bright blue hue that makes him stand out a bit more in open society. Lastly many of his veins leading up to his eyes and fingers glow blue, but to compensate for this Jace is always wearing either a hoodie or other long-sleeved attire. [/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-left: 10px;]ABOUT PAST EVENTS[/style][STYLE= margin: 0px 10px 0px 10px; border: 2px solid #191919; padding: 2px; font-family: verdana; height: 125px; overflow: auto; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; background-color: #ffffff; opacity: 0.8] Jace lived with his best friend's, Blake's, aunt and uncle during his early years quickly realizing he had powers. He was however opted by them not to exploit them and make haste into hiding them from usual society at whatever cost. After his rather short years of school, he would continue on to be a healer in a more natural sense not confiding to normal doctors confinement in a hospital. By this it is meant that he was more of a spiritual healer of sorts. Currently he lives inside the city of Salem with his own small shop for spiritual healing. [/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-left: 10px;]POWER SET[/style][STYLE= margin: 0px 10px 0px 10px; border: 2px solid #191919; padding: 2px; font-family: verdana; height: 125px; overflow: auto; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; background-color: #ffffff; opacity: 0.8] - Energy Blasts Jace is capable of expelling different forms of various energies from his body, and while some are helpful other can be deadly. As a healer of sorts he tends to use his power for the good of others and thus excels mostly in the healing side.
- Energy Healing: By expelling small amount of energy into the pressure points through acupressure or touching the points of pain he can essentially heal. In a sense this means Jace uses chiropractic science combined with his own power to heal a person by not only getting rid of the pain but speeding up the cells by expelling energy to the person's body. The energy expelled will speed up the body's natural process and the heal time is drastically increased, but never by more than a few days.
- Energy Destruction: Much as it sounds this ability allows Jace to expel much more energy into someone causing detrimental effects to the person's body; however, he can not cause a person's body to completely shut down through over exposure. It also allows him to put his power into an inanimate object and be held there to be used to cut or sever things, such as a human's arm.
[/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 10px; margin-top: 10px; margin-left: 10px;]Inventory [/style][STYLE= margin: 0px 10px 0px 10px; border: 2px solid #191919; padding: 2px; font-family: verdana; height: 125px; overflow: auto; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; background-color: #ffffff; opacity: 0.8] - Book of Shadows
- Crescent Disks [ Resembles a Crescent Moon ]
- Journal
[/style][STYLE=color: #191919; font-size: 12px; margin-top: 10px; margin-bottom: 10px; text-align: center; font-family: courier new]Application was created by Jace Beleren[/style] | [atrb=border,0,true][atrb=cellpadding,0,true][atrb=valign,top][atrb=cellspacing,0,true][atrb=style, width: 40px;][STYLE=background-color: #f1e3b4; font-family: courier new; font-size: 30px; color: #404040; min-height: 150px; padding: 5px; text-align: center; moz-border-radius: 0px 10px 10px 0px; -o-border-radius: 0px 10px 10px 0px; border-radius: 0px 10px 10px 0px; -webkit-border-radius: 0px 10px 10px 0px;]Mind Sculptor[/style] |
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Post by Lizzy on Aug 12, 2012 22:16:00 GMT -7
Hi Jace! Welcome to our site and we're glad to have you on board. Just a couple tiny fixes need to be made on your application first.
1. For birth place, please include the city as well.
2. I find the powers a bit confusing. Could you please go more in depth with them? How do they heal?
"Such as a arm" you say at the end of your destructive powers. I'm not sure what you're talking about by that either. Could you please reread your powers and attempt to go through the grammatical aspects as well?
Thank you! Good start!
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Post by Jace Beleren on Aug 12, 2012 22:57:01 GMT -7
Sorry I was waiting for Kazamaru to list the city he was born in, because I lived with his Aunt and Uncle. None the less I added Los Angeles hoping he would just go with it.
I hope I explained better this time, I am like a Chinese spiritual healer. With my powers I expel it in small amounts in order to speed up the healing process in a human's body. In a sense I am replenishing their chakra that is stored in every human body
[ and no i'm not referring to Naruto xD ]
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Post by Lizzy on Aug 12, 2012 23:09:58 GMT -7
The think is, chakra is a "mystical" energy, and this site uses the scientific-fiction portion of x-men. Being that chakra is a magical energy, your power cannot replenish it. Although there may be magical aspects of the world of Marvel, we're not venturing into them for the mutants on the forum. Please make the necessary adjustments.
Also, you can delete the GPA part since you are not a student.
Thank you! Your app is almost there!
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Post by Jace Beleren on Aug 12, 2012 23:16:09 GMT -7
I suppose I could always refer to them as pressure points as that is all they are. By restore I meant restore the natural energy we have which gained either by sleep, eating, and other things. [ which this natural energy is referred to as Chakra in Chinese spiritual healings, acupuncture, and acupressure techniques. ] I edited accordingly referring to it as pressure points to go with the normal chiropractic standard of the word; however, if anything does not work just feel free to private message me because I obviously failed to understand.
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Post by Alexander on Aug 12, 2012 23:27:53 GMT -7
Sorry, hate to do this, but a couple more things need to be addressed. Mainly where exactly his body gets this "energy" from. Mutants who possess the ability to fire off blasts of energy like Havok or Cyclops do not have an infinite supply and in their case their body metabolizes ambient energies in their body into that which they use in their attacks, even then they do not have an infinite supply and notably in Cyclops' case he fires almost pitiful beams when out of energy and needing to recharge. You need to explain where his energy comes from and how much he has (it can be a time limit sort of deal or a blast limit if you want to get too technical but a time limit is enough). As well you need to explain what sort of damage those energy blasts are, are they concussive? Bringing it back to Cyclops his blasts are concussive despite their "laser" appearance though have no recoil. Is the damage done with heat, more like an actual laser? If so just how much damage does it do? Answer this and I see no more problems really.
P.S. If you want to go for a "mystical healer" mutant that is fine just note that pressure points don't actually have that effect. Being a mutant your power is essentially scientific in basic nature and you do not possess the skills needed to do real magic in the Marvel sense a la Dr. Strange. He can BELIEVE it has an effect and that may be a character quirk for him but for our purposes they do not.
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